Poor Imp

The rotund lord sat at his dinning table, waiting for his servants to come with his regal meal. They were terribly late and the only way he could keep his ...

This ought to be copied and printed. Blackmail, right? when Smaur is a famous writer. :wink: liek omg! i coould soooo make so much mony like that!111 :lol: :roll:

I don't have anything particularly pointed to say. It reminded me of Cake. Have you ever heard...? Like "Building a Religion" in tone and rythm - which worked. Good imagery. ...

...Well, I have to say I rather liked the story - it came out deceptively prosaic (pardon the pun); but it had a snap to it. I liked the characters. ...

D'you know...you bewildered me. Yes, totally involving...and um, good...and and I don't speak ...l337? Or is it... Forget it. I thought you were Nate for minute. :lol: :shock:

That was a fun read - I loved the voice of the character; it was distinct. I've just got a few comments. But whenever I answered a question she’d respond ...

It sounds as if it would be hilarious rapped. In fact, it sounds like a parody of 50 cent, yo? Sorry. Well, it was an amusing read, as I could ...

...That was lovely. A beautiful prayer - poignantly expressed; as anything but a prayer it might seem strange, but it comes out so well, almost litany. Thanks. It's beautiful. Children ...

Oh man - this is the most entertaining bit I've read here, and the most amusing! Wonderfully absurdist...but I'm not going to try to analyse. Analysation - the bane of ...

Ay - I very much enjoyed that. Frankly, it doesn't flow in a traditionally spanish sense - but then, most modern poetry in any language has ditched the old forms. ...

I like the theme. Very apt. ...I'm trying to hear it, like a song...did you have a melody in mind? (Just curious - do you write songs as well as ...

Very amusing flash-sort-of-fiction. :D Ah, I'd double space between paragraphs and check the punctuation really quick - that's all. Might make it a bit more readable. But brilliant on the ...

Firstly, I was drawn into the moment with the beginning sentences. Very vivid; and you noticeably have a sense of how the whole scene looks and feels. My only and ...

Good, vivid voice - the detail draws me in. I might break up the two huge paragraphs - it would likely flow better. The repetition of 'bastard' also throws it ...

That was excellent. ...Though excellent almost seems too cold a word for it; it was poignant, very neat for all that it was mostly recollection. Something irreversible happened that day. ...